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Terra et Celestia - Prologue


Once upon a time in a land far away, two children were born from an elven mother and a human father. While the magic within the first child, who was named Celestia, was as strong as the magic of her mother, the second child, going by the name of Terra inherited only little magical power. They were like two sides of the same medal...and they knew that.
While Terra was being bullied by other elves, Celestia enjoyed high prestige among them. That was because of the difference in magical power. The worth of an elf was determined by the magic they possess. In spite of that, Celestia never let her sister down, well knowing that it may as well have been the other way around. Several years passed...many at that.

Their father passed away during their childhood at the age of 86 in his home land. Celestia and Terra were around 50 by then...or 14 elven years. They didn't cry. For they knew that humans can't live closely as long as elves or half elves. But one of those days...they just had turned 100 human years...they were given a reason to cry. For the world they knew for the past century was about to end.

But let us not jump right into misery. Let us start a little before.
About...two weeks before their 100th birthday...or their 18th elven year (elves grow slower with each passing year...at least they do here) Celestia and Terra were conducting a field study on the flora of the forest they lived in.

Celestia called over to Terra: "Hey, what are those flowers called again?!"
Terra called back: "What does it look like?!"
"Well, it's fairly large and blue and..."
Terra stepped over behind Celestia: "That's a man-eater plant. If you touch it you may loose your finger. The human name is: Lilius Carnivorus. And you asked about that flower yesterday already."

"What, really?" Celestia scratched her head.
Terra bowed down and carefully picked the flower.

"Hey, what are you DOING?!" Celestia enraged herself.
"I'm picking a flower."
"But!"
"Listen. We'll be adults when the next two weeks are over. We've waited for this moment a long time. And if you don't learn for the trial of adulthood you'll end up like this flower. It took the flower a lifetime...basically an eternity for her standard...to grow. And I ripped her out in a matter of seconds. If you aren't prepared for the world
of the adults, you'll be ripped out by it like I just did with this flower. And then no magic of the world can help you. What good is all the magic of the world, if you don't know how to use it?"

Celestia seemed a little annoyed.
"Hey, I'm a much better magician than you are!" she said.

"Ah really? Prove it then. Here is the flower. Make it...let's say into a common daisy and make it live again."
"What?! That's high class magic!"
"So what? You just said you were a great magician. So what's a little higher class spell compared to your power?"
Celestia blushed a little and then said: "What was the spell again?"
Terra recited a few words, pressed the flower on the ground and when she lifted her hand again it had become a daisy in full bloom.
Terra then said: "Life is precious. As is knowledge. I'd have never ripped out that flower if I didn't know the spell to bring it back. You've got a head on those shoulders of yours. Use it." She then turned around to resume her own studies.

"Why are you being so mean to me, Terra?"
"You've been protecting me with your power ever since we were small. Now it's my turn to protect you with mine. And besides the brains I inherited from father I've got nothing to help you." Terra simply said.
And Celestia knew she was right. From early on Terra didn't have it easy. She studied books instead of playing with other elves. Not that she didn't want to play...only the other elves didn't want to play with her. The day passed while they were studying. Celestia called for help a few more times and Terra helped her as good as she could.
Just a few minutes before night fell Celestia suddenly was startled.
Terra went over and asked: "What is it? Something wrong?"
"Shh..."
Terra understood. From the two Celestia had the far better senses. Even if something was marching through the forest a mile away she was able to hear it.
Terra remained silent, waiting for Celestia to speak.
After a while Celestia whispered: "There's an intruder in the forest. We need to get home quickly!"
"An intruder? In our forest? Is it a human?"
"...I don't know for sure...I just know that it's neither an animal nor an elf..."
"Then it's got to be a human. It must have been ages since I saw the last one..."
"You aren't thinking what I think you are thinking, are you?"
"You bet I am. Come on, we'll check this human out!"
"Are you insane?! What if he spots us?"
"Humans are dumb. If we don't walk out into the open he'll never notice us. Furthermore it is our duty to chase all intruders out of the forest if they seek to do it
harm. And if not to hunt animals, why would a human enter our forest?"
Celestia moaned: "Hunt elves maybe?"
"Hey. Except for father there hasn't been a single human in this forest for the past
century. And if father had told other humans about us, they wouldn't have waited that long to search for us."
"...this human logic is terrible."
"Just admit that I'm right and come." Terra jumped up and ran into the forest. Her steps were light and swift.
'She really got the cross-country run covered...' Celestia thought and took up the trail. Her steps were supported by magic and hence less technical and yet silent as leaves falling to the ground.

After a while Celestia found Terra sitting in the crown of a tree.
She whispered: "You really are crazy, you know that? You can't even bewitch anyone, how do
you want to expel them then?"
"I don't have to, that's what I've got you for." Terra answered.

In the close distance something was approaching the clearing.
"How did you know where you need to go to anyway?" Celestia asked.

Terra asked: "What, do you never talk to the spirits?"
'I would, but they don't talk to me...' Celestia thought.

Now a rustling followed by a shadow jumping from the bushes occurred.
Terra curiously bowed over to see what had entered their forest. But then she ducked down full of fear.
"What? What is it?" Celestia asked.
Terra didn't say anything but only pointed downwards.
Celestia bowed over a little, cautious not to make any noise. And when she looked down her blood began to freeze. An entity emitting an aura of pure evil was standing on the clearing they monitored. Celestia pulled her head back when the entity started to turn it's head towards their position. Through a shield of leaves they were able to see eyes, glowing like burning pieces of coal, stare at them.
Then it turned around and vanished into the bushes again.
Terra was the first one to move a limb again: "I suggest we get outta here as fast as we can..."

Celestia quickly agreed with her.
Using Celestia's magic they teleported back to the elven village.
Celestia asked: "Okay Terra...just what was that?"
"Whatever it was, I don't want to ever see it again..." Terra replied, still in a state of semi-shock.

When they slowly snapped out of it, Celestia said: "We got to report this to the Elder!"
"Are you stupid?! If we do that they reinforce the spell circle around the village and we're stuck here for the next decade!"
Celestia objected: "But..."
"Listen, we have to find out what that thing was first. Then we can do something about it if it is needed. Until then not a single word to any of the elders."

Celestia nodded. It was not a good idea to argue with Terra when she was like that.
She then asked: "So..."
"Whatever you do, don't tell mother about this thing. We meet tomorrow morning in the magical library."

"...man, why us? Why can't that happen to someone of the adults? They'd know what to do..."
"Don't give me that. The adults are never leaving the village. And why would they. The spell circle protects them and they can obtain everything they need in here. Face it: If we told them what we saw, we'd trigger a panic."

Celestia meant to say something when their mother called them: "Celestia! Terra! Come home for Dinner!"
"Not a single word, got it?" Terra repeated. Then they ran over to their house.
I was told, that it would be better if I segmented my stories so here I go. These are the first 1.5 pages of Terra et Celestia (which can be downloaded in the complete version too).

I will divide the main chapter into little subchapters and enumerate them, so it'll be easier to keep track of them.

I hope you'll like it and give some good commentary.
Thank you.

Part two: [link]
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Sivire Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
You really made their personalities apparent, and they're definately believable sisters! I love the symbolism in their names too.

I'm intrigued! I shall be reading more :3
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Refugnic Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :) And yeah, I chose those names on full purpose (well, and because they sounded nice ;)), so they would represent their 'alignment' well :)

Have a fun read :)
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L-Storyteller Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Student Writer
I love the way Terra uses symbols. It's fascinating. :3
I might just start reading this story in a better time <3
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Refugnic Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why, thank you :)

Also for coming around all the way to my gallery to look at the story :)

I hope you'll find it enjoyable. If you find any mistakes (like typos and stuff), feel free to let me know. Unfortunately I didn't get around to segment it properly yet...that's pretty high on my list :)
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L-Storyteller Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Student Writer
I understand. It is quite hard to check the grammar well if the language you're writing isn't your native. :'3 Like English for me.
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Refugnic Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It seems you misunderstood what I meant by 'Segment' ;)

The story as such is complete, however it is lacking a proof-reading and a segmentation in various chapters. Because the way it is now, it is far too difficult too read here on dA.

But yeah, while my spelling is rather good, grammar remains to be my Achilles heel :)
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L-Storyteller Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Student Writer
Agh... sorry for that. I'm still nothing but a mere child so I'm not that good when it comes to English yet :'D There are some words that are still too difficult for me to understand.
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Refugnic Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your profile states you're 16. That's a bit past 'mere child'. It's called 'adolescence'. (Child only extends up to 12 years ;)).

But don't worry, I'm consider myself pretty good with English (or German), but there are still words I have never heard before...in both languages.

Life is a constant process of learning. So, as long as you keep trying, you can't really go wrong...at least that's my opinion :)
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L-Storyteller Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Student Writer
Your words are quite encouraging. Thank you. :'3 Though I still quite feel myself to be more of child than a young adult.
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Refugnic Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. And preserving a bit of childishness is a good thing in my opinion.

After all, what would life be like, if we weren't capable of being carefree like a child...at least every now and then.

Having fun without making demands or thinking too much...that's something many people probably should strive for, instead of making even more money.
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